some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job,others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. discuss both sides

Today there are various ways for getting
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a job
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and
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specialize in it. Some people believe that getting a degree from a university is useful and helpful for having a profession
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but others say we must go straight into
work
and get experience
instead
. In
this
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we will investigate
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subject and
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present some pros and cons.
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possible
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university has attractive and theoretical
nevertheless
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to get a job
that
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she
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must go straight into
work
. When you start
a
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work
in a real condition
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atmosphere you gain several
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; you make
a
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relationship with expert_
boss
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_
colleagues
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and colleagues
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… as well as accustom to hours of
work
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income_
how
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to
work
with tools … or deal with clients…. Regardless of these facts the best benefit making or getting new experience during working and
also
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with others for
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a solution
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solution
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. As I have already mentioned we must do
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directly. Universities
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a specific plan they just survey_ present
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teach
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… problems or skills theoretically as
the
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result students will don’t have
commitment
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for
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it while if you enter to
work
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and present
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correctly; because you have chief
_
responsibility -
also
you earn money through it. It seems
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only defect you maybe rely on experience and don’t have
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with
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scientific ideas or methods. In conclusion nowadays if someone has
decided
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get a job there are different ways
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, for instance,
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for instance
we can go to university and study lessons_ skills theoretically with
special
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the special
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situation
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there.
Other
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way we can go straight into
work
with getting new experiences
such
as
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with
teammate
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_
clients _
wage
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_
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and reward
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reward
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generally
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work
incidents by pros and cons.
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