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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

#country #study #job #friend #lives #help
Dear Kim, I am writing
this
 letter to inform
to
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you
a
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of
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 great
new
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news
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. I am going to Canada to study Master’s degree
specialty
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of
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accountant
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 and I really need you to support me there. I will learn for two years in
International
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 school in Toronto and I will stay
a
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hostel near my school. Six months
first
 ,I only study
english
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 and I have to spend
time
 to
accustomize
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customize
 new environment there. Six months
next
, I start to learn
major
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 subject and
i
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 have to study hard
this
time
. But
second
years
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, I just attend four hours a day in class. I will have a lot of free
time
 and I have
plan
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for
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tourist
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 around Canada
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for about
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about
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first
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 half a year.
The
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 remaining period of
time
, I need to find a part-
time
 job
is
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related to my speciality to earn
experienc
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experience
 and I hope I can find a good job to have
opportunity
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 to work and live in Canada with you. I would be grateful if you recommend somewhere or somebody
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who need
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need
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 staff
accoutant
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accountant
account
 which you know for me. I hope to see you soon Yours Sincerely My Huynh
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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