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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective. Comics, books, radio, television, film, theater.

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Communication mode among
public
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 has been evolving since the pre-historic time.
Moreover
,
people
 chose various methods to share their ideas
among
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 each other
such
 as
:
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television
,
radio
, film, comics,
books
, film,
theater
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,
and
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etc. With the industrial revolution, purchasing
of
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new machines became popular among
general
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the general
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 public and it allowed them to connect with each other easily.
Furthermore
, when it comes to
information
 sharing, it is believed by
majority
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a majority
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 of
people
, that
television
,
radio
, and
books
 are the most useful.
This
 essay argues the advantages and disadvantages of the modes including,
television
,
radio
, and
books
. In the present
day
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 most
people
 watch
television
 to know the details around them
in
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on
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 day to day basis.
For instance
,
people
 watch
news
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the news
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 on daily basis to know about
weather
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the weather
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, sports events, political
situation
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situations
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,
and
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etc.
Furthermore
, it can be considered
as
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one of the fastest
mode
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modes
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 of detail sharing.
However
, sometimes it is questionable about the details that they are sharing. Before
television
 was invented,
radio
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the radio
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 was popular in general households.
Furthermore
, it is a convenient way to get updated while they are driving on the road.
However
,
people
 prefer the
television
 where they can see the presenter on their screen. Though it has always been a drawback for the listeners, there are
people
 who enjoy listening to
radio
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the radio
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. When
people
 invented printing technology, many writers were able to share
the
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information
 with others. Even in
the
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modern society,
books
 are considered
as
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a valuable reference to seek
information
. As well as, it
is commonly use
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 in educational institutes.
However
,
in
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at
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 present,
people
 can purchase e-
books
form
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from
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 the
interent
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internet
.
Therefore
, they do not have to keep
physical
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a physical
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copy
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copies
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 of the
books
 with them every time. In conclusion,
books
,
television
, and
radio
 play a vital role in
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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 of
general
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the general
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 public. It is important to share the correct
information
 among them because they have the right to seek the truth about everything.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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