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some poeple work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think thst it is better to work for different organisations. discuss both these view and give your opinion.

#poeple #work #organisation #life #thst #organisations
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Many
people
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 spend all their
lifetime
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 working for the same company. In the
contruary
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contrary
, we can find
people
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 which always alter their organisation. In both ,points there are positive and negative things. For ,instance working for the same group for a long time could create a monotony situation in your life, and even at the start you loved your job is probable that you may start hating it
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. An advantage of
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 option is
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 more easily
settle
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 down and compose a big family with so many children and
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 have a big group of friends and still have all familiar near to you,
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 is the most important thing for a lot of
people
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. A fixed place in an agency gives you more certainties and stability,
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 will be not possible with constant "new activity".
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, changing frequently the company is always a new challenge because you have to create a new curriculum, send emails to recruiters
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.
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, the change in work could
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 mean changing country, changing house, changing the routine and meeting new
people
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. Working and living in a different contest asks more determination and is useful to have an exclusive skills portfolio. Of course, not all jobs require to constantly
change
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changing
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company
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companies
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 to try new experiences,
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sailors could work for the same organisation for all their life but they never work with the same sea conditions and the same crew on the same track.
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 is possible to say that both of them are good options and
each
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 single person should choice
in
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is
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 based on his/her priority in life.
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