Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language?

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education. Because they believe study in

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Globalized education
Access to education
High-quality institutions
Career opportunities
Proficiency
Prerequisite
Cultural immersion
Language skills
Global network
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Academic resources
Comprehensive
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Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of the school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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