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Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations.Some people say that governments should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that inexpensive passenger flights have resulted in more airport expansion, noise, and
air
 pollution. In my opinion, it would be wrong for the
government
 to implement
taxes
 more aggressively in order to decrease
air
traffic
. There are several reasons why I would argue against imposing heavy taxation.
Firstly
, as
taxes
 rise, airlines will raise ticket prices, resulting in a drop in demand for
air
 travel. To
further
 illustrate, passengers will travel individually in their own cars, ultimately increasing
traffic
 congestion.
Secondly
, implementing heavy tax
is
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just shifts the problems associated with
air
traffic
, as more cars on the road only
worsens
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 noise pollution.
Finally
, high
taxes
 will have a profound impact on tourism since rising airfare prices will make more people reluctant to travel.
On the other hand
,
impose
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 higher
taxes
 is beneficial to
government
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the government
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 since it
increase
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 the national income. The
government
 may utilize the excess money to boost the economy by creating more job opportunities.
For instance
, investing in the infrastructure sector,
such
 as a hospital, police station, or maintenance of public facilities, could greatly improve the
citizens
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 quality of life. The creation of
this
 infrastructure would lead to more jobs being accessible, which might boost a country's real GDP.
In addition
, visitors spend money at hotels, restaurants, and shops, and on transportation services like vehicle rentals, all of which are good for the national economy. In conclusion, the
government
 should not impose a heavy tax on the airline business but
instead
 boost local tourism and seek other possible solutions to
air
traffic
 problems.
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