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some poeple work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think thst it is better to work for different organisations. discuss both these view and give your opinion.

#poeple #work #organisation #life #thst #organisations
Working for the same company for all life is the best choice for someone but for others
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 there are positive and negative aspects and in
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 will try to illustrate all of them .
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first
 type of people, so the ones that prefer
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 for the same groups for a long time, it could create a monotony situation in your life and, in
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 way, there is the possibility to start a sort of hate to the
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job
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 that you loved before. At the same time,
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 a fixed place in an agency gives you more
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certainties
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 down,
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 a big family and a great group of friends can be easier.
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 who
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 to change always his or her condition. Of course, in
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the
 life will be so much more
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movement
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probably
 your emotional sphere may be overlooked.
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 look for new challenges ask a
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 determination, because of the
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living
 in a different series of
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, but
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 is good to have a more exclusive skills portfolio
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which
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