People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
people
more often use
credit
cards
than other different methods of payment.
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cards
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more advantages than
disadvantages
since
people
can keep their
money
on
credit
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card
.
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essay will examine
advantages
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the advantages
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and
disadvantages
of using
credit
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card
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cards
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to make monthly purchases. On the one hand, the two main advantages of using
credit
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card
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are usability and safe storage of
money
.
Firstly
, using
charge
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card
is comfortable for
people
.
Therefore
, they do not need
a certain physical
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a certain physical bank
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banks
to
keeping
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money
.
Moreover
, it is more convenient to pay
online
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purchases or
buying
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something in real life.
For instance
, we have
a
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plenty of several
credit
cards
from different international
banks
.
Secondly
, it is more
safely
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to keep
money
in
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credit
cards
since a multitude of
banks
has
a
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strong digital security against hackers.
For example
,
banks
hire specialists
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cyber-security
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the cyber-security
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of the bank.
Furthermore
, thieves are easier to steal
money
from purses than with
credit
card
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.
On the other hand
,
credit
cards
also
has
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some major
disadvantages
like
credit
card
hacking and
inability
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the inability
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to open a
credit
card
for children. At the moment, we have a lot of crime in
digital
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world.
Hence
, it
also
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related
with
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credit
cards
.
For example
, hackers trying to steal
money
from
people
's
credit
cards
.
In addition
, children can not use
credit
cards
,
subsequently
, we need to give them
money
in hand.
For example
,
banks
do not issue
credit
card
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until the age of 16. In conclusion, if we still have some
disadvantages
of using
credit
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card
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to make monthly purchases, the benefits well outweigh them. Because
,
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it is comfortable for
people
and more safely
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money
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cashless transactions
  • Financial footprint
  • Interest rates
  • Credit score
  • Consumerism
  • Debt accumulation
  • Expenditure tracking
  • Fraudulent activities
  • Overspending
  • Purchase protection
  • Revolving credit
  • Creditworthiness
  • Impulse buying
  • Secured credit card
  • Unsecured credit card
  • Spending limit
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