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Various
risk
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factors
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 have been reported in the literature for
mucormycosis
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 which are listed in
Ttable
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Table
 1[5,6]. The difference in the prevalence of
risk
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factors
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/underlying disease varies among different countries. Prakash H et al
in
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2019 published a
review
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 on the global epidemiology of
mucormycosis
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 and reported that in Asian countries,
diabetes
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 mellitus is the most common
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risk
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 transplantation and
hematologicalhaematological
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hematological haematological
 disorders are more commonly seen
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factors
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 in European countries.[75]. With the pandemic around the globe, there is an increase in
rhinomaxillary
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mucormycosis
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 in
Ccovid-19
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COVID-19
 recovered
patients
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. Acute lung damage in
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 is controlled by administering corticosteroids.
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 led to transient
hyperglycemia
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, which
coupled with
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 low immunity served as an ideal environment for fungal growth and proliferation. Fungus once established in the paranasal sinuses can spread rapidly to the orbit and cerebral region via the nasolacrimal duct and medial orbit. So, it can be assumed that
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/
risk
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factors
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 for
rhinomaxillary
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mucormycosis
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. Table 1.
Risk
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factors
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 for
Rhinomaxillary
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Mucormycosis
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 [2,5,6,7] 1.Neutropenia 2.Diabetic Ketoacidosis 3.Malnutrition 4.Severe Burns 5.Hematological Malignancies 6.Hematopoietic Stem Cell Transplants 7.
Patients
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 Under Cancer Chemotherapy 8.Immunosuppressive Drug Therapy eEg
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 Corticosteroids Use 9.Deferoxamine Therapy 10.
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Covid-19
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Rhinomaxillary
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mucormycosis
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 located in the periodontal tissue (gingival and alveolar bone)
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 rare. Most often, the clinical presentation is that of a non-healing extraction socket. Initial signs are non-specific necrotic ulcer, which later turns into a characteristic black necrotic lesion. A literature search was performed in
PubMed
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/Medline database using the terms “periodontal
mucormycosis
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”, “
rhinomaxillary
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mucormycosis
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” and “gingival
mucormycosis
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”. A total of 35 research papers have been retrieved. Only
case
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 reports in which
cases
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 showed periodontal or gingival presentation of
mucormycosis
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maxillary
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 or mandibular arch were considered. A total of eleven
case
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 reports were included in the manuscript, whose main characteristics have been summarized in
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 2 given below. None of these reported
cases
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 had
history
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 of
Covid-19
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. Nagalli et. al. in 2021 published a systematic
review
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 on “
Mucormycosis
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 in
Covid-19
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” [6]. None of the
cases
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 in their
review
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 showed any gingival or periodontal clinical findings. Roden MM et al.
in
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2005 conducted a
review
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 of 929
cases
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 of zygomycosis.[86]. The
review
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 showed that the fungal infection mainly occurred in the mean age group of 38.8 years with a higher prevalence seen in the males (65%) compared to females.
Diabetes
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 mellitus was the most common underlying condition seen in most of the
patients
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. 154
patients
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 presented with a malignant neoplasm, among which 147 (95%) were having
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 malignancies.
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, Bonifaz A et al
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2020 in their literature
review
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 reported 11
cases
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 of periodontal
mucormycosis
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. The common
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 factor in 10 of the
patients
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 was hematological malignancies and one was reported with
diabetes
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.[97]. In the present paper, the first
case
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 had transient
hyperglycemia
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due to
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 intake for
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 treatment,
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case
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 had controlled
diabetes
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 but had taken steroids for
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covid-19
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 treatment, which again
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 to transient
hyperglycemia
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 during the treatment and the third patient had uncontrolled
diabetes
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 and was not taking any medications for the same.
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three
patients
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 was
hyperglycemia
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 during Ccovid-19 infection. All
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three
cases
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 showed
mucormycosis
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 presentation within two months of
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Covid-19
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 recovery.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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