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Write a letter to the manager of the Lost and Found department of the railway regarding the luggage you accidentally left on the train. In your letter o give the details of your train trip o describe the luggage you left on the train o say what actions you want him/her to take.

#manager #lost #department #railway #luggage #train #trip #actions
Dear sir I am writing to
connection
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 with getting
los
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lots
loss
Los
 of my bag. I went to visit my grandmother and father in
the
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New York city Saturday
last
 week. And after 2 days I came back to Chicago by train
10
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at 10
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 a.m. from Paddington station. My chair was near the window in front of
entrance
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the entrance
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 door and I remember a young man with a sad face was sitting beside me. which didn’t say anything in the way. I had a black sports bag which I put
it
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into
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 the
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 above my head, I slept in the
was
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way
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 and when we arrive
to
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at
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station
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the station
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, I forgot to take it. Please if the staff of
train
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 found my bag let me know and if you have additional information don’t hesitate to call me or send me an email. Yours sincerely Reza
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