Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

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There is no doubt
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play a crucial role in
society
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. increasing
sports
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facilities
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will be motivated the
people
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of any country .
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, while some believe that these
facilities
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would not enough for
people
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's
health
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and
also
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it needs more
activity
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for them. I would agree with those who argue that improving one facility should not be the best way for civilians.
Firstly
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it is vital that
sports
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keep our
society
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fit and healthy. if
people
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, who want to keep their bodies healthy, play
Sports
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regularly, they will become fit.
in addition
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,
people
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want better comfort when they practice
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activities. If they will get more
facilities
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, they will be more interested in going
practicing
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physical
activity
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.
on the other hand
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, if civilian
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does not feel the homely environment in the playground, they will leave on
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sports
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.
as a result
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, the ideal rate of Public
Health
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will falling off in the future.
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, I believe that there is a lot of
activity
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which is emergency for all classes of
people
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to refitment. not only improving
sports
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facilities
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but
also
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other resources should be improved.
significant
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part of the
people
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in our
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are above on 50th, they are not capable to take any playground
activity
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because of their
aging
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problem. Authorities should be reminded if they would take any decision about
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.
for example
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, arranging a Marathon or cycle running competition will increase
people
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's inspiration about their
health
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. by arranging public
health
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campaigns and insurance proficiency, civil
people
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will get more benefits than
sports
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facilities
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. In conclusion,
Sports
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facilities
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are needed in our
society
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for improving
people
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's
health
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but
this
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is not the major object which has not any alternative to gearing up public
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. There have several events available in our
society
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which will improve
health
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issues more faster and significantly rather than
sports
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activities so that all generations of
people
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should take part.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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