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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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 as much as important as educational
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 and most
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 illness cause prevent by
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, I am of the opinion , should allocate the same amount of money to
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 and libraries and I
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, a healthy mind needs a healthy body
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 universities should encourage students to exercise, absolutely
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 works effectively to improve my study ,
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 was at the academy for my bachelor, I was a member of the university's sambo
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 and did exercise
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 was in good mood and was an effect of learning
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, the university can have a better
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 and help the national
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 in the future. many studies have shown that most the national
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team
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 originated from university sport
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 to conclude, the basis of my view is based on two reasons that written above
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activities
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 as much as important as educational
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 policy of universities are different
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