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Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers.Some people think that it would be better for the envionment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that consuming
food
 produced locally would be better economically and environmentally. I agree with
this
 statement because transporting
food
 too far would increase its price and
also
 contribute to global CO2 pollution.
This
 essay will explain the reason and
also
 why the opposite is still practised today.
First
, consuming locally has been the norm for thousands of years. Until the advent of the industrial revolution, people only eat what grows in their region or the neighbouring ones. That's because it's fresher and more suitable to grow in their climate. With healthier crops, they can produce more
food
 on smaller land without the need for excessive fertilizer and pesticides. Because of that,
food
 grown locally and eaten locally are healthier for the people and for the environment. Not only that, but because the consumer can buy directly from the producer, it's cheaper and
also
 going to help the local economy.
Second
, though eating local
food
 has many benefits, sometime it doesn't make sense in the context of the global economy.
For example
, some
area
 has
cheaper
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 and better
food
 source, while another
area
 has cheaper manpower for packing and processing. Another reason might be because some
food
 is only produced in certain areas, while other areas that cannot produce that
food
 still want to consume it.
Thus
, some
food
 eaten in one
area
 might be processed in another
area
 and produced in another different
area
 across the globe. In conclusion, eating local
food
 is better from the perspective of the environment and the local economy.
Although
, from the perspective of big global corporations, often it's cheaper to transport
food
 thousands of miles to the consumer.
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