In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is claimed by several
people
governments ought to allocate most of their budget to new railway lines for very fast trains
between cities. Beside
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Besides
this
, some of
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apply
people
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the people
believes
that money should be spent on Change the verb form
believe
ımproving
existing public Correct your spelling
improving
transport
instead
of fast trains
.
I totally agree with the former and would like to highlight various advantages and drawbacks of encouraging the development of train systems
.
I agree because of 2 major resonse
.
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response
reasons
Firstly
, safety is really important on the road and railways while people
traveling
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travel
work
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and work
orn
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or
on
regular
basis. Correct article usage
a regular
For instance
, drivers should concentrate to
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on
road
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the road
extremly
when they are Correct your spelling
extremely
on
traffic, not just Change preposition
in
avaid
accidents but Correct your spelling
avoid
also
prevent
other drivers from causing problems on the road. Fix the infinitive
to prevent
High speed
rails Add a hyphen
High-speed
has
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have
oto
control by high technologies which Correct your spelling
to
is
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are
allows
driving professional Change the verb form
allow
controlling
.
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control
Secondly
, some of
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apply
people
prefer to live Add an article
the people
further
and further
away from city centres where land and house more
affordable. Add a missing verb
are more
High speed
rail allows Add a hyphen
High-speed
to
these Change preposition
apply
communters
to travel Correct your spelling
commuters
greater
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a greater
distance
in a shorter amount of time. Fix the agreement mistake
distances
In addition
to this
, trafic
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traffic
jam
reduce roads delay while Fix the agreement mistake
jams
caused
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causing
least
air Correct article usage
the least
polllutants
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pollutants
with
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in
this
way.
On the other hand
, fast trains
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are significantlly
significantlly
expensive, Correct your spelling
significantly
some
believe that Correct word choice
and some
this
money could be spend
on repairing and renovating transportation Change the verb form
be spent
be spending
systems
which is already exist
. Another possibility Change the verb form
already exist
also
goverments
could allocate their budgets to build more Correct your spelling
governments
government
trains
and buses to service the ever-expanding urban population. Moreover
, boats and ferries could benefit from a budget which focuses more on existing forms of transport
.
In conclusion, I would like to firmly agree with the suggestion of constructing new rail lines for very fast trains
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train
systems
in comprison
to improving existing train Correct your spelling
comparison
systems
. Public transport
is a
issue which affects us all. The taxes which we pay should be spent on the type of Change the article
an
transport
which will have the most benefit to all citizens. In addition
, we need to take into account how much th
environment is damaged by fossil fuels and pollution. Correct your spelling
the
Therefore
, I believe in order to move forward, we need to embrace the idea of high speed
rail so that Add a hyphen
high-speed
futue
generations can continue to live safely and efficiently.Correct your spelling
future
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