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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
Every day in the world there are more and more traffic accidents on the highway associated with truck
drivers
. Many people believe that to prevent
such
 situations, they should take a driving exam every year. I completely agree with
this
 statement for a number of reasons. One of the arguments
why I support
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, why I support this idea,
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this
 idea is a modification in the road’s rules or the addition of new aspects to them. A huge number of
drivers
 are already experienced in their field, but it is necessary to repeat the decrees to prevent
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 situations
such
 as
car
 crashes and others. Collisions can be fatal or result in injuries like whiplash, broken ribs, and concussions due to a couple of simple choices.
Additionally
, road transportation infrastructure plays a significant role in managing the country conveniently and annually conducting and testing
drivers
 improves their skills and predicts road safety.
Nevertheless
, these days, many accidents occur not due to the driver’s inexperience, but due to the atrocious quality of
roads
: the presence of holes or slippery
roads
 in winter. The local government should track the conditions of the
roads
 in the same way that
drivers
 should look after the state of their
car
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cars
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. Every year more and more collisions are the result of
vehicle’s
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vehicles
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 malfunctioning.
In addition
 to passing the annual exams,
drivers
 should
also
 take their
car
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cars
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 for a serviceability check every year. To conclude,
annual
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 conducting and testing of
drivers
 is a really positive development, but in order to reduce the number of traffic accidents to a minimum, local authorities should monitor the good condition of the
roads
, and
drivers
 should take care of their
car
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 and do not forget to send it in for repair for inspection.
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