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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every day in the world there are more and more traffic accidents on the highway associated with truck
drivers
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. Many people believe that to prevent
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 situations, they should take a driving exam every year. I completely agree with
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 statement for a number of reasons. One of the arguments
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 idea is a modification in the road’s rules or the addition of new aspects to them. A huge number of
drivers
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 are already experienced in their field, but it is necessary to repeat the decrees to prevent
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 situations
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 as
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 crashes and others. Collisions can be fatal or result in injuries like whiplash, broken ribs, and concussions due to a couple of simple choices.
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, road transportation infrastructure plays a significant role in managing the country conveniently and annually conducting and testing
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 improves their skills and predicts road safety.
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, these days, many accidents occur not due to the driver’s inexperience, but due to the atrocious quality of
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: the presence of holes or slippery
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 in winter. The local government should track the conditions of the
roads
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 in the same way that
drivers
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 should look after the state of their
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car
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. Every year more and more collisions are the result of
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 malfunctioning.
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 to passing the annual exams,
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 should
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 take their
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car
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 for a serviceability check every year. To conclude,
annual
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 conducting and testing of
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 is a really positive development, but in order to reduce the number of traffic accidents to a minimum, local authorities should monitor the good condition of the
roads
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, and
drivers
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 should take care of their
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car
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 and do not forget to send it in for repair for inspection.

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