Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer group pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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,  youngsters are frequently
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by their
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friends and it can be named
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the pressure
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of
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team.
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essay will examine both advantages and disadvantages side of impacting
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peers
to others and provide a logical conclusion. Two main advantages side of having
peers
are working with more competitive
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feelings
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and encouragement.
Firstly
, if children do participate or study
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one
place with some of the same age friends,
then
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opponent
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each other at that time and it
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the perfect condition like competition, as
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they try to do the everything
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better,
therefore
this
can be quite a
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worthwhile
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for like sport or study.
Moreover
, they are able to develop their own skills with the help of working with
peers
. Because of
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of studying or doing some interesting things, they always support their partner with some motivational words
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commerce to reduce their own effectiveness.
However
, there
are
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also
some negative
side
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sides
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of working with
peers
like
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the
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bad behaviour and
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their environment.
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of being with people who are the same age can be
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too for their behaviour.
That is
to say
,
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if someone
do
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their everything with
peers
after they may
change
their own conduct even which can be
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model person for others to worse
one
.
Furthermore
, by being together with
peers
all the time,
one
of them may
change
their own environment to
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one
, and it can create some challenges to anything
such
as
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with someone. To conclude,
although
there are some advantages of working together with
peers
like
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the behaviour and environment, I feel that can be handy for them to do anything with high spirits.
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