Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?

There are some controversial
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heating a debate over historical
area
.
While
some claim that there are some historical sites
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attractive to international
tourist
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but not indigenous
one
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,
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it is necessary to make historical places become a tourism appealing to local
people
. I consider myself an advocate of
this
idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, there
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a great many
of
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reasons for foreigners to take a keen interest in
local
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area
. Because they want to digest more knowledge about Vietnamese
history
.
For instance
, a wealth of tourists from America, which had a battle previously, travel to Vietnam to acknowledge how can
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revolution
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successful and have
such
a burning desire to get a chance to drop in
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of historical
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.
As a result
, a great many
of
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tourists are attracted by the historical sites
While
an
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ignorance is widely acknowledged, there is a myriad of ways to make the local
people
to
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become a historical place
enthusiast
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. Because
history
brings a bunch of useful benefits
that
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people
will study times of suffering and times of joy, and the lessons they learn here can
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then
be applied to their own life
experience
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experiences
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.
For example
, the Vietnamese
government is
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gateway to
history
becomes an obligatory subject in school to teach the
student
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about the long-stand
history
of Vietnamese
history
.
Hence
, there is a tactic that
make
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a historical
area
appealing to local
people
.
To sum up
,
while
an eclectic mix of tourists come
over
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historical
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areas
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but not local
one
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, it is necessary to make historical
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become
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attractive to them
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