Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
There are some controversial
perspective
heating a debate over historical Fix the agreement mistake
perspectives
area
. While
some claim that there are some historical sites become
attractive to international Verb problem
that are
tourist
but not indigenous Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
one
, Correct pronoun usage
ones
and
it is necessary to make historical places become a tourism appealing to local Correct word choice
apply
people
. I consider myself an advocate of this
idea.
Without a shadow of a doubt, there is
a great many Change the verb form
are
of
reasons for foreigners to take a keen interest in Change preposition
apply
local
Add an article
the local
area
. Because they want to digest more knowledge about Vietnamese history
. For instance
, a wealth of tourists from America, which had a battle previously, travel to Vietnam to acknowledge how can Vietnamese’s
revolution Change noun form
Vietnamese
become
successful and have Wrong verb form
became
such
a burning desire to get a chance to drop in a lots
of historical Correct the article-noun agreement
a lot
lots
area
. Change to a plural noun
areas
As a result
, a great many of
tourists are attracted by the historical sites
Change preposition
apply
While
an
ignorance is widely acknowledged, there is a myriad of ways to make the local Remove the article
apply
people
to
become a historical place Change the verb form
apply
enthusiast
. Because Fix the agreement mistake
enthusiasts
history
brings a bunch of useful benefits that
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apply
people
will study times of suffering and times of joy, and the lessons they learn here can be
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apply
then
be applied to their own life experience
. Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
For example
, the Vietnamese government is
gateway to Correct your spelling
government's
history
becomes an obligatory subject in school to teach the student
about the long-stand Fix the agreement mistake
students
history
of Vietnamese history
. Hence
, there is a tactic that make
a historical Change the verb form
makes
area
appealing to local people
.
To sum up
, while
an eclectic mix of tourists come over
historical Change preposition
to
area
but not local Fix the agreement mistake
areas
one
, it is necessary to make historical Fix the agreement mistake
ones
area
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