Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer group pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, a number of youngsters are being encouraged by their equals which
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peer
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pressure
. From my point of view,
peer
pressure
can be both, positive as well as negative but mostly it is positive and
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and cons of
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First
and foremost, there are a number of significant benefits of
peer
encouragement since it can be a great deal of companionship and inspiration.
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to
this
, if peers
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better performance at
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or do their best in a sport
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they can influence those around them to be more productive.
For example
, according to the recent
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results which were taken from schools,
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of the students who have
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a better performance after
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peer
pressure
. Turning to the other side of the argument, despite some advantages, there are
also
negative sides
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Firstly
, there can be a number of negative influences of
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pressure
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individuals according to the fact that
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humans may not only
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by their performance but
also
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.
For instance
, nowadays, majority of the youngsters are encountering some challenges to find a better
peer
for themselves that can influence
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since these days, it is difficult to find those who can be
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encouragement. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned up, I can come to the conclusion
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that, despite some obvious disadvantages of
peer
pressure
it can be influenced positively if you find the right person.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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