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Some people say that playing computer games is bad for children in every aspect. Others say that playing computer games can have positive effects on the way children develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued whether playing computer
games
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 helps
children’s
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life
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 development or not. Personally, I think playing
games
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 is a good approach to improving
children’s
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 problem-solving and collaboration skills.
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, it could
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 cause adverse effects on their mental and physical health. On the one hand,
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 players can gain a sense of achievement by overcoming those
challenges
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 in
games
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. That might be the reason why
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 players could play a
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 for
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 and
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 at a time.
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, some
games
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 require many players to work together to solve
problems
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 and pass the
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.
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, these
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 are like
problems
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 or difficulties we might face in our daily
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, but children can learn problem-solving skills in a pleasurable way without high pressure.
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,
gamifying
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gratifying
challenges
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 can help youngsters and students learn easier and better.
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, playing
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 for long
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 every day can
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 damage
children’s
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 health.
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, long screen time can harm
children’s
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 eyesight, and result in a sedentary lifestyle, eventually leading to over-weight
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.
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, playing computer
games
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 reduce
children’s
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 face-to-face interactions, which might make them under high social pressure when they are meeting their classmates or relations. Ultimately, they might stay at home all day without social activities with their families and have
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difficulties
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building intimate relationships with others. In conclusion, gamifying our
life
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challenges
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 could give children an interesting way to learn how to solve
problems
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 by themselves or working with a team.
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, if they spend too much time on
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, playing
games
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 would become a drawback to their health.
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, I believe children should balance their playing
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 and practice their skills not only in the virtual gaming world but
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 in their real
life
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Academic performance
  • Social interactions
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Obesity
  • Desensitize
  • Cognitive development
  • Problem-solving
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Multiplayer games
  • Social interaction
  • Teamwork
  • Moderation
  • Proper guidance
  • Monitor
  • Time limits
  • Balanced approach
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