In the past, many people had skill such as making their own clothes and doing repair to things in the house. In many countries, nowadays, skills like these are disappearing. Why do you think this change is happening? how far is this situation true in your country?

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In
olden
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days,
people
were skilled enough to sew their own outfits and repair household items.
However
, these
skills
seem to be vanishing in recent years due to a variety of reasons.
This
essay illustrates some factors contributing to
this
change and discusses the
present day
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situation in my country. There are compelling reasons for the decline of
such
skills
among humans. Nowadays,
people
spend more time in their
work place
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workplace
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and they find it difficult to do extra work at home.
Also
, there
are
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is
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a wide range of commercial shops and service centres available to perform
such
jobs in a short period of time. Due to the constant evolution of new designs,
people
are attracted towards
such
commercial markets and they forget to implement their
skills
.
Moreover
,
people
’s lifestyle has changed and they are earning more, so they value things less.
As a result
,
instead
of repairing the old one,
people
prefer to buy a better one. In my country India, there is a gradual disappearance of these
skills
;
nevertheless
, a majority of
people
still possess these
skills
. In order to save money, some women sew the clothes of their family members and some men tend to do minor repairs at
homes
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home
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.
However
,
people
of
this
generation prefer to get ready-made or fancy dresses which are readily available in
market
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the market
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.
Also
, they indulge in various other leisure activities like sports and arts and
hence
they have little or no interest in stitching their clothes or fixing things. In conclusion,
people
possessed a lot of
skills
in the past and now those
skills
are disappearing. It is the change in lifestyle and their busy schedules that
makes
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make
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them unwilling to do things on their own / by themselves.
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