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Some people say learners should start their debating and presentation skills in their early age rather than in their higher institutes. To what extent you agree?

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 discussion regarding which age group is suitable to boost creativity and skills.A group of individuals claims that it is better for you to start debates and presentations from an early age.
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,some believe that you will automatically learn
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 of stuff in your higher institutions.As far as I am concerned,I think that Practice makes a man perfect.I firmly believe that your will is your best motivation that would lead you towards success.In my opinion, What you learn from your try will create your abilities and give you the power to think outside of the box.My above discussion will be enough to hammer down the former opinion. First of all,I would like to elaborate on the benefits of the primary point of view.
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,it is scientifically proven that at
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 kids have the ability to perform
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 learn
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 tasks.
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,when they go to edifying
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 they can say
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 part in curriculum activities very proudly.Because they are already familiar with their rules and regulations.
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,one of my group fellows was outstanding in communication skills.And she ability to persuade anyone by dint of her art.The reason was that she was used to
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 of stuff from her childhood.
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 students will become quick learners and some will suffer a lack of confidence.
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,the school can show you the path
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 later or
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 it's your duty to proceed forward.
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,in our
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 teachers
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 give opportunities to those students who are active and confident.In addressing,in
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 a teacher cannot pay attention to everyone. At
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, it's the duty of parents to teach their children about curriculum activities from childhood.In conclusion,I think that every child should have the courage to learn more and take participate in every
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 whether related to
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 subject or not.

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task response
Include a clear thesis statement that states your opinion more explicitly at the end of the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to follow a logical order of ideas. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader.
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Make sure to support each main point with clear examples and explanations to strengthen your arguments.
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Good effort in presenting both sides of the argument.
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Your conclusion does summarize your overall opinion well.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • debate
  • presentation
  • skill
  • communicate
  • confidence
  • child
  • develop
  • earlier
  • teach
  • learn
  • important
  • future
  • career
  • school
  • critical
  • thinking
  • social
  • respect
  • teamwork
  • viewpoint
  • express
  • idea
  • clear
  • foundation
  • information
  • area
  • challenge
  • persuasion
  • early
  • exposure
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