Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree?

in
this
era, smoking is a big problem
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some
country
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. the government has published public
policy
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including no
smoke
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in
public
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a public
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area
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. most
of
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people
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completely agree because there are several benefits from
this
regulation. it is true that smoking in the open area has many negative effects. not only dangerous for
human
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humans
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but
also
contaminate the environment.
firstly
,
the
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smoke
destroy
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our health.
moreover
, not only for
the
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smokers
but
also
dangerous for other people in the same place. some serious
illness
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were made by cigarettes,
such
as lung cancer.
secondly
, smoking in the open place will distribute
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fog around the atmosphere that will be polluting the air. not only that
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from
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this
activity
also
invent
a
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waste from the packaging that can contaminate the environment. the majority agree with
this
policy
because they will get extra benefits.
for example
, by
this
policy
the
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smokers
will learn how to apply
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in the community.
the
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smokers
must use their private
room
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rooms
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to
smoking
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.
furthermore
, by
this
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these
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regulations
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the
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smokers
can be
more wise
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to use their money
with
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another thing that
more
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usefull
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useful
.
on the other hand
, some parents gladly
to
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attend a public garden with their children. because they were not worrying again about the smoke.
as a result
, they will be enjoying the fresh air in the playground. in
conlusion
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conclusion
, the
policy
from governments that forbidden smoking in
the
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public area because smoking has a lot of negative effects
for
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the community.
this
policy
will make a comfortable place with
the
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fresh air and
green
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a green
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environment.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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