Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. You should write at least 250 words.
It is true that many
people
suffer in
financial problems due to Change preposition
from
unable
to clear a huge amount of Add a missing verb
being unable
loans
in recent year
. Some Fix the agreement mistake
years
people
believe that bank
should tighten the approval loan process Fix the agreement mistake
banks
of
Change preposition
for
huge
Add an article
the huge
loan
. Personally, I disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
loans
this
views
.
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view
Firstly
, they will be black market occurs if Add an article
the bank
bank
made individuals hard to lend money. In the reality, some individuals will borrow money directly from illegal parties, these parties typically set a very Fix the agreement mistake
banks
high interest
rate and approval the applicants easily. As the maturity date Add a hyphen
high-interest
around
the corner, the borrowers Add a missing verb
is around
unable
to pay the money because of Add a missing verb
were unable
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the high
high interest
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high-interest
rate
had Fix the agreement mistake
rates
double
the total Wrong verb form
doubled
repay
amount. Replace the word
repayment
Consequently
, third
parties will consistently interfering
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interfere
be interfering
the
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with the
borrowers
life and in the Change to a genitive case
borrower's
borrowers'
worse case
scenario, they might Correct the spelling
worst-case
causes
persecution of family members, which Change the verb form
cause
create
more social issues.
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creates
On the other hand
, increase
the difficulties to borrow Wrong verb form
increasing
loan
could greatly reduce the number of Fix the agreement mistake
loans
people
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who bankcrupt
bankcrupt
. Correct your spelling
bankrupt
This
is because for
the Add the comma(s)
,for
people
who do not meet the requirements, bank
should not easily Add an article
the bank
a bank
approval
their Replace the word
approve
loans
. To further
illustarte
, Correct your spelling
illustrate
bank
should check the Add an article
the bank
a bank
applicants
background details closely in order to make sure the person Change to a genitive case
applicant's
applicants'
have
the ability to pay off their Change the verb form
has
loans
. Add an article
The bank
A bank
Bank
should Fix the agreement mistake
Banks
also
limit an individual credit cards
quota based on their income level. Change the noun form
card
Hence
, people
should be able to clear their loans
by the end of the maturity date without any issues.
In conclusion, I do not believe that bank
should made
Change the verb form
make
be made
Correct pronoun usage
it more
more tough
for individuals to lend Replace the words
tougher
a massive
Correct the article-noun agreement
massive loans
a massive loan
loans
as this
will only lead more
Change preposition
to more
people
Add the particle
to suffer
suffer
in their life and might possibly Wrong verb form
suffering
generates
more uncertain social problems.Change the verb form
generate
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