Many people are using credit cards or loans to run up huge personal debts that they may be unable to repay. It should therefore be made more difficult for individuals to borrow large amounts of money. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is true that many
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have financial hardships
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of their inability to pay off a sizable amount of debt in the previous year. Some
people
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think that
banks
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should tighten the guidelines for large loan approvals. I don't agree with these opinions personally.
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, there will be a black market occurs if
banks
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make it difficult for individuals to lend
money
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. In reality, some individuals will borrow
money
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directly from illegal parties; these parties typically set a very
high interest
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rate and approve the applicants easily. As the maturity date approached, the borrowers who were unable to pay due to the
high interest
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rate had doubled the total repayment amount.
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,
third
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parties will consistently interfere with the borrower's life, and in the worst-case scenario, they might cause the persecution of family members, which creates more social issues.
On the other hand
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, making it more difficult to borrow
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could significantly reduce the number of
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who go bankrupt.
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is because, for those who do not meet the requirements,
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should not easily approve their loans. To
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illustrate,
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should check the applicant's background details closely in order to make sure the person has the ability to pay off their loans. The bank should
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limit an individual's credit card quota based on their income level.
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,
people
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should be able to clear their loans by the end of the maturity date without any issues. In conclusion, I do not believe that
banks
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should make it more difficult for individuals to lend large sums of
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, as
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will only cause more
people
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to suffer and may result in more uncertain social problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial literacy
  • credit cards
  • loans
  • debts
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • stringent checks
  • balances
  • repaying
  • reckless spending
  • living beyond one's means
  • financial destabilization
  • regulations
  • cap (verb)
  • income
  • financial commitments
  • mandatory financial education
  • financial decisions
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