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Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 say that
history
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 is the most important subject in school.
On the contrary
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, some
people
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 think that studying subjects like
science
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 and
technology
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 is more important than learning
history
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. I am of the view that
science
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 and
technology
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 have more benefits in our world
today
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 Many
people
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 say that
history
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 is the most important subject they study at school.
First
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, there is the theory of historical circulation. By learning about past events and the
lives
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 of
people
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 who have lived in the past, you can understand what
people
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 need to learn
today
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. These contents are good materials that
people
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 can refer to in their
lives
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. In short, it means a mirror reflecting the present and the future, but
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,
history
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 goes around.
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, it is
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 good for cultivating individual culture. The content of the conversation with others will become richer and
people
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's insight will be expanded.
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, it is to develop historical thinking skills. Learning
history
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 is the most important reason. You can see the background, cause, and opportunity of events in the past, and how they progressed and affected.
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,
people
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 can develop their thinking skills in the process of exploring the intentions, motives, and purpose of their work in
history
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.
This
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 ability to think is very useful for analyzing and understanding the events of the world in which
people
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 live
today
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. Some
people
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 think that studying
science
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 and
technology
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 is more important than studying
history
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.
First
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,
science
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 and
technology
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 are most closely related to our daily
lives
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. Everything we use is a product that contains
Science
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 and
technology
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.
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, automobiles, semiconductors, displays, and communications, which are most common in everyday life, cannot be developed without basic
science
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such
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 as physics and chemistry.
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, in recent years, Sciences
such
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 as medicine and pharmaceutical
science
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 have a lot of attention. The development of life sciences in
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 way is
also
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 due to the development of
science
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 and
technology
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 which are closely related to our way of life and health and the more
technology
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 continues to develop the more comfortable and convenient our
lives
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 will become. In conclusion,
Although
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 some
people
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 believe that
history
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 is one of the core courses to be included in the school program, I am of the view that
science
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 and
technology
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 have more benefits in our world
today
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 as they make for convenient living and lower mortality rates.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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