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Some people say full time students should spend most of time studying; others believe that they should do other activities as well.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #time #students #activities
The bar chart illustrates the total world
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for countries in 1950 and 2003 with a prediction of the
number
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 in percentages. Overall, India is the only country with
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number
 throughout the year compared to the other three. At the beginning of the period, China accounted for the greatest
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population
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, with 23%.
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 pattern was noticeable in Japan, where the
population
 was just under 5% in 1950, yet by 2050 it will only be 1%. Meanwhile, in the USA, the
population
 was just over 5% in 1950 and slightly decreased to 5% in 2002. It was projected that, by 2050, the USA will still have the same amount of
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 it was in 2002 by 2050. In 1950, India was the
second
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number of
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population
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15%. Over the year, the
number
 grew by 2% in 2002. It is projected that by 2050, it increased just under 20%, making it the country with the highest
population
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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