A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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personal value in terms of honour, kindness and trust are less likely not important.

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having rich friends, it will increase their honour over their

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Topic Vocabulary:

Social status
Material possessions
Old-fashioned values
Honour
Kindness
Trust
Judged
Importance
Traditional
Reflection
Achievements
Hard work
Disregarded
Well-balanced
Meaningful
Cultural norms
Societal norms

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