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Women are better leaders than men. Do you agree or disagree

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There has been an
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assertion by some people that
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 are better at
leadership
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 compared to
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. Assessing
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 statement critically, I would strongly agree with it. One of the qualities of a good leader is the ability to protect the lives and properties of his or her subjects.
Leadership
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 under the auspice of
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, in most cases, has seen some nations go into unnecessary wars that led to catastrophic fatalities. Arguably,
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 by nature are more aggressive than
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.
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 is probably due to the effects of testosterone seen in
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. We have seen wars in countries like Iraq, Afghanistan and most recently Ukraine and Russia. Notably, these nations are governed by
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.
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 to a nation like Croatia, which has had a woman at the helm of affairs.
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, Liberia which was ravaged by war
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 has been revived by a woman president. Corruption is the bane of many societies. The vast majority of countries are not left out. African societies are mostly governed by
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 and they have been destroyed by the instrument of corruption.
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 is not the case in some European nations like the United Kingdom that have had
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 like Margaret Thatcher and Theresa May rule them. Another example is Germany
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 has had a woman Chancellor. These countries witnessed dramatic economic growth, courtesy of zero tolerance for corruption by the females that ruled them. In the present world, more
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 are being entrusted with important
leadership
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 roles. A good example is Dr Okonjo Iweala, who is the head of the World Trade Organisation Family is the smallest subset of
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society. Generally,
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 are touted as the head of the family but
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 are the real leaders in families. Realistically, the females run the family.
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 is because they are better managers of resources and better organisers. In conclusion,
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 we live in a
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 world,
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 have demonstrated more excellent and efficient
leadership
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.

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