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You are watching television and saw a program being shown early in the morning that contained a lot of violence. You believe the program is unsuitable for that time of day. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter :- Give reason for writing. Explain what you think the problem is with the program. Say what you would like the station manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to concern about your daily
TV
 program
in
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particularly
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 in the morning.
This
 show included many crime and
violance
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violence
violent
 scenes for my
children
.
First
 of all, I have two boys and they are 6 and 8 ages. Every morning, they wake up
7
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a.m. and
watching
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TV
. My family
like
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 so much your channel, but especially in
early
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the early
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time
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times
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 are showed horror series, so
children
 are
frightening
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.
Secondly
, The
programme
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programme's
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 name is Black Cat. Some mornings I wake up together with my child and I do not allow
to
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them to
her to
him to
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 watch
this
TV
 show.
Unfortunatelly
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Unfortunately
,
somedays
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some days
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 I can not
control
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itcontrol
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. I would like to
chance
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change
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 the program time. In fact, if it is possible that you can show
after
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up after
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 10 p.m. in the evening. Because at
this
 time my
children
 fall
a sleep
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asleep
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. My
another
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other
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 offer for
this
 problem is that it may
be create
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 new Black Cat
TV
 series for
children
. I look forward to
replying
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my
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 letter and solving my family problem. Yours faithfully, Orhan Veli Çanakçı
Submitted by orhanveli2006 on

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