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do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to explain that.

#television #communication #friends
The advent of technology led to facing a lot of problems that before we didn’t have and it
consequelly
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consequently
 changes the way in which we communicate with others.
However
, in my humble opinion, I believe that
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television doesn’t ruin our
behavior
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 in social life. In fact, it is visible that there had always been families in which there wasn’t communication and it is
also
 true that
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, nowadays, have
deep
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a deep
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relationship
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relationships
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 like in the past, even if they spend
time
 with electronic
advices
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devices
.
To begin
 with, we can analyze that today it is true that there are a lot of families in which the components don’t speak to each other, but it was always like that. A family is formed by individuals who didn’t
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 to stay there. So can happen sometimes that we don’t agree with our own dad or mother.
Moreover
, sometimes,
also
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marriage could be difficult, but the fault is not
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the advice : people
devorce
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divorce
divorced
 a long
time
 ago as today.
Secondly
, it is possible to see how people still have in their life deep link with their friends. In fact, the friendship that we develop since we are little remain during
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the time
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, even if we watch television. To add, it is
also
 visible that the movies and the tv series can
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 friends and help them to have special moments.
For instance
, if there is a movie
that is
 good to see with others, it can
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 the
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of
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 a meeting, and it can contribute to
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 some unforgettable occasions to stay together,
such
 as when the teenagers organize
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a pjama
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pjama
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pyjama
 party to watch films to spend
time
 together. In conclusion, as
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 in life, we have to pay attention to how
muchwe
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much we
much
 do something,
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also
on
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 how much
everyday
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 we watch
the
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Tv, but
on the other hand
, if we do something with balance
such
 as spending
time
 on tv series with our dears there is nothing wrong. Maybe in a family without
communication
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 it can
also
 bring some share moments.
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