Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality of work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals insist that they should be allowed to wear what they want comfortably when they
work
, saying it will increase their
work
efficiency.
In contrast
, there are some people who don'
t
agree with the statement, saying that dressing up is
also
a part of
work
. In my opinion, it should be up to what kind of jobs the
employees
have.
For example
, if one needs to meet their
clients
face
to
face
, it's unavoidable for them to wear proper
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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. None of
clients
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the clients
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will welcome a bank
officer
with
t-shirt
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a t-shirt
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and jeans. It will make the client think that the bank
officer
isn'
t
serious with their job and they don'
t
want to
work
considerably.
This
situation will impact the business of the company.
Hence
, it's an understandable case where
the
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employers care
their
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about their
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employees
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employee's
employees'
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dress.
However
, there are
also
work
fields where dressing up at
workplace
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the workplace
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isn'
t
as important. I can give an example of
post
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a post
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officer
. Nowadays in Korea, it's being less and less common to deliver a parcel
face
to
face
to their
clients
. Because there are many cameras and security boxes to drop off the parcels, both
clients
and post officers prefer
the
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contactless delivery. In
this
situation, it doesn'
t
matter whether the post
officer
wears
nicely
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or not. It's more important that he feels comfortable with his clothes so that he can
work
without unnecessary
efforts
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caused by wearing
on
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uncomfortable clothes. In conclusion, there can'
t
be only one answer to
this
statement. It depends on where the person
work
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works
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. It should be guaranteed that
employees
wear
comfortably
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comfortable
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in their workplace. But there is a limit. It cannot be accepted that
employees
wear as they want
while
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when
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they need to
mee
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meet
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their
clients
.
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