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the different stages in the production of woolen goods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram illustrates the different stages in the production of woollen goods from farming the sheep to manufacturing woollen products like jackets and carpets. The process starts with raising sheep on a farm, after the sheep are mature, they grow a good amount of wool on their bodies
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 fur is harvested by shearing. After a good quantity of fur is collected it is
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 sent for washing and cleaning,
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 clean cashmere is dried and spun into tuffs these tuffs of fleece are
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 stored in big tuft storage. The spinning process
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 creates a lot of waste string which is recycled. The tuffs are
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 processed to form balls of yarn which are used for knitting,
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 yarn is
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 sent to factories for producing sweaters, jackets and carpets. In conclusion, we can say that from
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 given diagram we learned about the processing harvesting and processing of fleece and got to know about the different types of products produced from it.

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