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Today, it is very common to have people from two different generations mix in the same workplace. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this situation?

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The pie chart demonstrates the amount of
revenue
 and money spent in 2016 on a children's charity located in the USA. It can be seen that there are multiple
revenue
 sources (donated food, community contributions,
program
revenue
, investment
income
, government grants, and other
income
) compared to the 3 expenditure categories being
program
 services, fundraising, management and general. Overall, donated food was the highest source of
income
 at slightly over 86%.
Similarly
, it is shown that one category,
program
 services, accounted for nearly all the money spent at about 95%. The other categories were much smaller in terms of
income
 and outcome. Community contributions, the
second
 largest
revenue
 source, were responsible for 10.4% of the overall earnings, followed by
program
revenue
 at 2.2%. Investing
income
, government grants and other
income
 were very small sources of
revenue
,
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only 0.8% combined. There were only two other expenditure items: fundraising and management and general, accounting for 2.6% and 1.6% respectively. The total amount of earnings was $53,561,580, which is just slightly higher than $53,224,896.
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