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Some employers are willing to give their workers a certain amount of unpaid sabbatical* time, believing this benefits the individual and the organisation. Other employers see no merit in this arrangement and discourage it. Consider the possible arguments for and against unpaid sabbatical leave, and reach a viewpoint of your own.

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Nowadays, we are working all year,
although
 some people believe that their leave periods are not enough while others contest the benefits of unpaid sabbatical
time
. Many firms could give
this
 unpaid moment to employees if they needed it. In
this
 essay, we are going to describe some advantages of both points of view.
Firstly
, Employers tend to argue, that leave
time
 is great for the organisation because of the "fresh start" and the increase in motivation. We can agree that the holidays benefit employees because they don't think about
work
 and spend
time
 with family and friends.
Hence
, enjoying moments far away from the office can relieve so much tension.
Then
, when people came back, they are ready to
work
.
For example
, in
France
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 every worker has five weeks of paid leave.
Nevertheless
, we can ask for a one-year vacation without being paid.
On the contrary
, Managers and HR disagree with it believing that paid leave is enough. Every
work
 needs to be paid but holidays should be earned on merit. The law already agree to several weeks paid so asking for more could be seen as proof of unmotivation. Workers should give 100% at
work
 to show their respect to the company. To sum up, everyone should have their own opinion about
this
 topic. Personally speaking, I guess that we should trust workers when they ask for some
time
 without salary.
Therefore
, I consider advantages are crucial for individuals and the organisation.
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