Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

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that the students at primary school must be taught creative

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as painting, music, and acting along with English, mathematics, and social science.

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the above nation, and it will

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discuss how art-related

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help

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choose their stream and why other

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essential for them. Students should not be confined to

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only basic

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as it hampers their development phase.

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is the time when they can participate in art-based

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as singing, dancing, and painting, which may help them in choosing the

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of their choice at the secondary level. If a child is not interested in theoretical

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, he must have other options to choose from. An article published in "The Times" stated that 80 out of 100 schools in the UK have added music and drama

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to their curriculums in order to create to the interests of

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learner

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Are English and social science worthless

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if thought

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small

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? No, every

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is essential for the overall as well as

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cognitive

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children

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. They need to be thought

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calculation

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and subtraction in order to buy anything from the school's canteens or any random shop. Equally, basic communication skills are

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required to socialize with others.

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these

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will help them to experience a

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curriculum. For intense

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year

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old need basic communication skills to have his/her own social circle.

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, various options can prove to be regarding for

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students In conclusion, every subject is important for primary school

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, but if they do not get an opportunity for hands-on experience in various

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, their interest would diminish and they would not know their subject of choice

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at primary level. Do you agree or disagree?

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