Some people think it is better for children to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vacations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In a society where life runs every day faster,
vacation
should be Add an article
a vacation
important
part of our existence, as Add an article
an important
without
recess, it would be impossible to live, too stressful to manage in everyday routine.
Thinking about the matter of Add the comma(s)
,without
Use synonyms
holiday
for Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
children
we have two points of view, which are who think Use synonyms
that is
better Linking Words
have
just Fix the infinitive
to have
one
Use synonyms
but
Correct word choice
apply
long
Add an article
a long
holiday
, and who believe Use synonyms
that is
better Linking Words
have
more Fix the infinitive
to have
holidays
, but Use synonyms
shorter
.
I will examine both sides of Correct pronoun usage
onesshorter
argument
and, in the end, I will give my personal opinion.
Add an article
the argument
an argument
To begin
Linking Words
with
who think is better Add a comma
,with
an
Change the article
a
one
long Use synonyms
holiday
, to sustain that, they assume it has a major benefit Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
for
children
Use synonyms
,
because they can totally stop Remove the comma
apply
with
their homework and assignments, Change preposition
apply
having
Wrong verb form
have
spare-time
to pass with their parents, Correct your spelling
spare time
friends
, Correct word choice
and friends
developing
new hobbies.Correct word choice
and developing
On the other hand
, Linking Words
who
think that Correct pronoun usage
those who
are
better more Correct subject-verb agreement
is
holidays
, but fewer, Use synonyms
they
assumed Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
thought, because they believe that just Linking Words
one
, even if longer, Use synonyms
Use synonyms
holiday
is not enough for Add an article
the holiday
a holiday
children
to Use synonyms
have
relax and Add the particle
tohave
break
Correct article usage
a break
with
their daily busy routine. Change preposition
from
Infact
, they argue that more Correct your spelling
In fact
holidays
enable kids to have Use synonyms
constantly
time to develop their leisure activities, friendship and relationship with their parents.
I agree with Change the adverb
constant
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
sustain
that are better more Correct subject-verb agreement
sustains
holiday
, even if they could be shorter, because, as previously written, they permit to have Use synonyms
regularly
space for what Change the adverb
regular
children
love more. Use synonyms
Besides
having short Linking Words
holidays
, when kids come back Use synonyms
in
daily Change preposition
to
routine
, I think they could have more willing to engage in their tasks.
To conclude, Fix the agreement mistake
routines
Add an article
the school
a school
school
should give Fix the agreement mistake
schools
to
students regular Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
holiday
and not just Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
one
Use synonyms
longer
.Correct pronoun usage
onelonger
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