You have seen an advertisement for part-time work in a hotel for three months over the summer. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter Say what experience you have Ask what the work involves Enquire about conditions
Dear Sir or Madam,
Recently, I saw your advert in the newspaper about a half-time job in a hotel for
this
summer. I am writing this
letter to let you know that I am highly enticed in this
work
.
In my experience, I worked as a manager for two years at junk food outlets in my town. Also
, I worked as an employee at a local café for one year. In addition
to this
, I had a qualification in the hotel management course .
Could you please tell me about what kind of job you offer ? In an
advertisement, you did not mention any specific job categories. If you could send me these details Correct article usage
the
then
I would become
able to make an appropriate decision .
I have some Verb problem
be
work
conditions such
as I could not be
able to Wrong verb form
being
work
in freezing environments as well as
at outdoor food junctions , while
I prefer to do work
at room temperature. Also
, I can not work
as a waiter in a hotel for a short period of time.
I hope that you will give me your feedback soon . I am eagerly waiting for your reply soon .
Yours faithfully,
Rahul Sharma.Submitted by bandhana322 on
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coherence cohesion
Although the overall structure is clear, the letter would benefit from more distinct paragraphs that develop single ideas more clearly. For example, you could separate your experience into one paragraph and your inquiries into another.
task achievement
Ensure that you address all aspects of the prompt in a balanced manner. While you have mentioned your experience and asked questions about the job, the conditions you specify could be elaborated further for more clarity.
task achievement
You have effectively used a polite and formal tone, suitable for a letter to a manager.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are properly aligned with the formal style of the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite