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You recently ordered an item of clothing through a store’s website. When you received it, you discovered that it was not the same item you had ordered. Write a letter to the store manager. In your letter, Describe the item you ordered Explain what was wrong with the item you received Say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Manager, I am writing regarding a skirt I ordered on your website. I received the item on Wednesday
last
 week and noticed that it was different from the
product
 I had ordered. I
had
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ordered a dusty pink pleated skirt of size xs on your website. It is made of polyester and runs to the ankle. I
however
 received
a
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the
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 wrong
product
. The
product
 that you have sent is a navy blue pleated skirt of size M. The
product
 is of a different
color
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colour
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 and size from what I
have
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ordered though it appears to be the same design. The
product
 is too large and I will not be able to wear it. I intended to wear it for a party
next
 week. It will
however
 be too late to ship the right
product
. I would like to request a refund for the item I have ordered. I look forward to a favourable response. Yours sincerely, Jane
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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