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In many cities, problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common . Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move out of cities to rural areas. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there is a large
number of
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population in cities and the regimes motivate both the city
residents
 and businesses to shift to the rural
areas
 for the sake of
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the environmental
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environmental
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. Personally, I think that there are major drawbacks of
this
 phenomenon
such
 as
decline
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a decline
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 in living standard ,economy and many more, while there is only one advantage to
environment
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the environment
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 that it
become
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 free from pollution . To Commence with, the disadvantages of shifting toward rural
areas
 .
First
 of all, the living standard of city
residents
 might get lower when they start to live in
villages
. It means that there is a lack of medical care , education and employment opportunities in rural
areas
 which badly
impact
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 the lifestyle of rural
residents
 .
For instance
, recent studies show that more rural
people
 are illiterate nowadays because of
limited
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a limited
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number
 of schools in their
areas
.
Secondly
, there is a limit on the growth of businesses when they move
at
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to
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 village locations.
In other words
, there are frequent transport facilities and
well educated
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people
 in towns which helps to proliferate various companies, whereas growth of the businesses disrupt in the rural
areas
 because of
lack
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the lack
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 of sources of supplies . For illustration,
the
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sales marketing is
worthless
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a worthless
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 idea in
villages
 because of attracting only a few
number
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numbers
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 of rural
residents
.
Therefore
, these two things are badly impacted by
moving
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the moving
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 of individuals from cities to
villages
.
However
, the only positive side of
this
 trend is that
environment
 becomes
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get
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 rid
from
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of
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 the drastic issue of pollution. By moving toward countryside
areas
 , there is a less
number
 of
people
 in cities which results in the lesser use of personal automobiles and
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a decrease
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decrease
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decreases
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the
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 level of carbon dioxide emissions in
environment
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an environment
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 which
further
 contributes toward a clear and clean nature. As a consequence, the
number
 of health issues is reduced in towns .
Hence
, the moving of
people
contribute
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 a positive role to their surrounding
environment
 . In conclusion, higher authorities
helps
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help
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 to reduce the pollution in
environment
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the environment
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through
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by
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 encouraging
people
 for shifting
in
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to
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villages
 but, I believe that the drawback outweigh an advantage because it is negatively impacted the living standard of
people
 and the growth of city industries.
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