in many cities construction of new houses and office buildings is not controlled, and it leads to everybody building in whichever style they want without thinking about design. Do you agree that advantages outeeigh the disdvantages?

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cities
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buildings
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are many benefits and some
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new flats,
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modern life themselves earn
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life and
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about
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family spend good life in future.
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new
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to create respect man in our society.
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children are not good and who
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their property in near future.
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property for his sons but, their
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sell her father's property.
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children are harmful to themselves. In conclusion, There are
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houses
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