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The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples.

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Nowadays, the cities are becoming very big and there is a lot of
traffic
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 on the streets. I believe by supporting free
transportation
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 there is a chance to reduce cars in the centre of the
city
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. I completely agree by getting
people
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 out of the
car
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 into
bus
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the bus
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 or train will solve a lot of
traffic
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 issues in the cities. Not only fewer cars but,
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 getting better air pollution by less
traffic
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 makes the living conditions better for everyone.
Firstly
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, the government needs to motivate to getting
people
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 out of their
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car
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cars
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 and on public
transportation
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. The best way by doing
that is
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 to make it interesting to take the bus
instead
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 of the
car
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 by supporting free transport in the
city
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, but
also
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 taking care of a good public transport system so that
people
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 can get easily to the places they need to be.
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Otherwise
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,Otherwise
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people
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 still choose their
car
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instead
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 of the bus or tram. Most important make it accessible to everyone.
Secondly
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, the other upside of free
transportation
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 is the living condition becomes better in the
city
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. Less
traffic
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 means fewer greenhouse gases and it makes it
also
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 quieter and safer to live in a
city
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. For, example if there are fewer streets and parking spaces needed it
to give
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gives
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 more space for parks and playgrounds. The government can provide that by making parking lots outside downtown and free
transportation
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 going
in
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into
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 town. In conclusion, I agree that free
transportation
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 benefits getting less
traffic
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 and better living conditions in the
city
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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