The best way to reduce traffic congestion in cities is to provide a free public transport service. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion with examples.

Nowadays, the cities are becoming very big and there is a lot of
traffic
on the streets. I believe by supporting free
transportation
there is a chance to reduce cars in the centre of the
city
. I completely agree by getting
people
out of the
car
into
bus
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the bus
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or train will solve a lot of
traffic
issues in the cities. Not only fewer cars but,
also
getting better air pollution by less
traffic
makes the living conditions better for everyone.
Firstly
, the government needs to motivate to getting
people
out of their
car
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cars
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and on public
transportation
. The best way by doing
that is
to make it interesting to take the bus
instead
of the
car
by supporting free transport in the
city
, but
also
taking care of a good public transport system so that
people
can get easily to the places they need to be.
Otherwise
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people
still choose their
car
instead
of the bus or tram. Most important make it accessible to everyone.
Secondly
, the other upside of free
transportation
is the living condition becomes better in the
city
. Less
traffic
means fewer greenhouse gases and it makes it
also
quieter and safer to live in a
city
. For, example if there are fewer streets and parking spaces needed it
to give
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more space for parks and playgrounds. The government can provide that by making parking lots outside downtown and free
transportation
going
in
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into
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town. In conclusion, I agree that free
transportation
benefits getting less
traffic
and better living conditions in the
city
.
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