Some people think that university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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school
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young people. Some
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that youth must lead by
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priority in majority choosing. Others in their turn insist on
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role of science and technology subjects for education because of their perspectives
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future.
Although
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pros of technic knowledge in an easier building
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career the benefits of realizing your potential in the job you have calling for are crucial to
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success in
a
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future
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. In fact, I have a preference
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second
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opinion. On the one
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people decide to learn
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a major which has
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great demand in the
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market after getting
education
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.
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choose
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leads to
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getting
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,
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in
earlier
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start for getting a promotion and
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salary and
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level of
life
in nearest future.
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, when
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sure
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his calling and
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in a course that he really wants. It contributes to unquestionable success in studying and how
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result
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academic performance.
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he
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the highest marks in
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.
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, his CV will be excellent for getting
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job of his dream
,
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and having an interesting and amazing
life
full of creatives and achievements. Despite on
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profits of getting popular and useful
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the moment occupation leads to
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life
, I believe that there are
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of people who should
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for
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their dream and chose courses
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their heart and point of view.
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  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
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  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
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