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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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Nowadays a lot of
people
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 believe that
students
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 should have
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 in choosing
university
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subjects
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 that they are interested in while other
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 of
people
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disagree
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 with
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 point of view and think that
students
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 ought to be involved only in studying those
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 which are related to their future major. In
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the 21’st
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21’st
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21st
 century there is a tendency among
students
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 to choose the major that resonates with their heartbeat. To illustrate that, my niece Sholpan was absolutely interested in aviation from her childhood.
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 when she became a student where she had an opportunity to be admitted to extracurricular classes
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university
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 and she had the
freedom
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 to study the
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 that interested her and mainly she chose those, which were helpful in being an air traffic controller,
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 as meteorology, aerodynamics and navigation.
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, her dream came true and she could easily join Aviation High School in Riga and became an air traffic controller of KazAeroNavigation JSC. Studying from passion is more effective in most
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the
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cases.
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, many
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 feel that
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 should join classes which are related to
technology
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 and science only without any choice,
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 as natural science and
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, information
technology
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 etc. and they should focus on studying these
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. Countrymen believe that in times of high
technology
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 and competition, countries must have highly qualified scientists and technologists, and if young
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 will mostly pay attention to arts and humanitarian
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, the country will not have
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 economy.
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, today young
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 think that there
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no
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 need to study any exact
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science
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 to be
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good
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blogger
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bloggers
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in
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absolute
freedom
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 to pick
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 for
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university
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students
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 is not a good idea as well and I agree with
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. In my opinion, there should be
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 correlation between the demands of the country’s jobs market and the
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 that are needed to be taught in universities. To conclude,
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certain
freedom
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 while picking
subjects
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 in
university
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 is very helpful for the overall development and knowledge enhancement of
students
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.
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,
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absolute
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 can make the outcome worse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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