Some people think that it’s a good idea to socialize with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it’s important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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this
modern era,
people
have a lot of different
friends
that are out of their society,
such
as jobs mates whom
people
see
them
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every day in
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the workplaces
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workplaces
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,
However
, some
people
believe that
work
colleagues
should have strong friendships for several reasons.Where, some say that the job is the job and the
work
is for the
work
, and show many factors for
this
view. In my opinion , both
views
are reasonably solid
views
.And in
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I will discuss both
views
with
the
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close
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eyes.
firstly
, in the
views
of
people
who say that
work
colleagues
can be closer and they say that it will benefit both the companies and workers. For ,example the
colleagues
will discuss barriers and solve that barriers in
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cooperative way.
Besides
, the companies will not need to lose employers if
everyone
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happy and feel comfortable .,Employers if they feel the company their home and
colleagues
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their colleagues
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are their
friends
they
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differently
last
for a long, and move the company forward.
Secondly
,
people
who do not agree with the employers should not have
a
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friends
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friends
from the
work
environment because that may lead to more problems and
work
progress may result in negative consequences. Fo,r example if managers and workers have close friendships may protest and not go to
work
or they may be united and freeze the
work
progress.
In addition
. they may go together to open a new business to complete with their company .
This
is what
people
are afraid of that may have sense. To sum up,
people
should have
friends
as they like and prefer from their
work
or from their private world that would help them live better and healthier.
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