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The table shows the budget in millions of dollars spent on 5 modes of advertisements by four automobile companies in the year 2002 Overall, it is clear that Renault spent the largest amount of money on advertising in 2002.
In addition
, TV media took the lead among the 5 forms of advertisements and
this
 was persistent across all the companies. The Cetirizine groups allocated $70
million
 to TV adverts which
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 the highest in 2022, followed by Vauxhall at $65
million
 meanwhile it was only $59
million
 and $45
million
 for Renault and Rovers respectively. As regards the press, Renault had the most significant amount disbursed to
this
 medium at $45
million
 which was slightly higher than that of Rovers at $38
million
.
however
,
in contrast
, Vauxhall and Cetrizine spent a far lesser amount. Of the other forms, all four companies spent the least on outdoor and cinema advertisements. Surprisingly, it was a similar expenditure for them all in terms of radio adverts.
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