Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a debate about which subject should be paid more attention to in our education,
history
or
science
. In my opinion,
although
high
technology
is vital to today's
world
, I still concur that
history
can teach the best lesson for everyone.
Science
and
technology
are the new
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our society, it is understandable to treat them seriously. No matter what, the underlying power that
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our
world
is
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undoubtedly
high-tech. The current generation is
borned
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born
in a technological
world
, so they are surrounded by various new
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teaches
. In order to help them harness the fancy scientific tools they are facing,
moreover
, for our future technological boosts, we should
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guarantee
the scientific knowledge they take in.
For example
, children nowadays need to understand what
technology
is, and learn
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benefits and drawbacks in school lessons, only in
this
way can they see the high-tech as an instrument they need to manage in their daily lives, and dedicate
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science
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when they grow up. When it comes to
history
, in my opinion, we have to see its fundamental impacts
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our society.
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Firstly
First
, learning
history
can help us understand how the
world
is shaped and our position in it.
Secondly
, we can know
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science
and
technology
better by studying
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history
.
For example
, knowing the
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of
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being
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can help a child understand numerous theories in our
history
, and to learn about the
history
of the whole
world
, a child can see the evolution of
technology
.
Finally
, we can always learn from our mistakes by learning
history
, which is vital for every individual. In conclusion, in the debate of which subject should be our main focus,
although
I do acknowledge the importance of
science
, I do concur
history
learning is more important.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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