Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.

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today is constantly growing and there seem to be very limited things bringing us all together. Arts,

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are areas which are actively been observed to attract large groups of people around the

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. I believe that the

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the government is investing in improving these

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is not a waste. Art has always been known to tell stories about our past and represent our present.

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a powerful weapon is shared among millions of people, it comes to great power.

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to that art brings tourism, which

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economy and

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exchange rates.

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exhibition happens on a large level, all the profit through any sale of the art goes to the government

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to improve public services.

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and theatre

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role in tourism and boosting the

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economy. Despite

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what the language they might be in , because of its rhythm and style it makes everyone feel aligned to relate and listen to it.

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the biggest boy band in the

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, BTS contributes to about 80% of South Korea's Economy.

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around the

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. In conclusion, I believe a rightful amount of

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should be dedicated to Arts,

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and

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theatre

while keeping in mind that public services need that investment in

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too. The

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brought from these

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should be put towards public services

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to improve the

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of life for the people too. If both are done in balance by the government everyone can benefit from

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greatly.