it is observed that most governments pay a lot of money for the art projects. For instance, there are more and more paintings and sculptures seen in public places. Some people say that it is wrong and governments should spend more money on other important things of public interest. Do you agree or disagree?

It is evident that many countries are spending a lot
for
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the art
projects
such
as
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paintings and sculptures. Some people including
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beleive
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believe
that governments should prioritize their spending on other important things for
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public.
First
and foremost, it is noted that many governments are allocating
large
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proportion
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proportions
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of
money
on
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non-essential sectors
such
as arts and entertainment.
This
is mainly due to
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income to the country. These attractive arts can bring more foreign and local
tourist
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and can improve
foreign
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reserve
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of a country.
However
, spending
large
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proportion of
money
on these
projects
can deplete a country's
finacial
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financial
reserve.
Eventhough
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large
money
spent
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on these schemes, some of them are not successful in making revenue and become
unfprofitable
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unprofitable
structures. In long
term
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there will be a high cost for the
maintainance
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maintenance
of these
projects
. In recent times, many of the
constries
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countries
are suffering bad financial conditions due to many reasons. Due to
pandemic
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and Russia's war on Ukraine, there are negative impacts on
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economy. Living
cost
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and energy
cost
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have increased exponentially.
For instance
, Sri Lanka
have
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experienced one of the worst economic crisis
in
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this
century.
Price
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of food, medicine and fuel soared to a record value. These countries should
seperate
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separate
more
money
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improving the essential needs of
public
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rather than spending on non-essentials . It is
a
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government's duty to provide better living conditions to the
tax payers
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who contribute mainly to the government's budget. In conclusion, there are many countries spending large
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of
money
on
arts
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projects
. I strongly believe that governments should focus more on
projects
that can benefit
public
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in
this
crisis period.
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