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Some children find some particular school subjects difficult (for example maths or philosophy), so these subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #school #subjects #maths #philosophy
I would like to disagree with putting difficult subjects to be optional in school because these subjects are the baseline on what the
children
 are learning in order for them to upscale their studies. It is
also
 beneficial for
children
 having difficult subjects for them to learn how to solve problems not only in school but they can
also
 use
these
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in their daily lives as they grow older. Philosophy
for example
 is essential for
children
 to learn because it will teach them the way of life. They can learn and practice towards people they meet. Having
this
 knowledge will give them the opportunity to be more relevant in facing difficulties on a daily basis. Math, on the other
side
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 is
also
 beneficial for
the
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children
 as the world is evolving too fast they need to cope
up
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.
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