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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to researchers, the concept of opting for a full-time permanent profession in the same organization for life from an early age, versus changing
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 frequently is always a topic of debate. Though, there are people who say the former is the best option, while the opposition says the latter. I agree that
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 should have an enduring occupation, and the reasons for it will be explained
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 with, if an individual has employment
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 everlasting he/she is free from any redundant stress both at the workplace and at home. Having constant
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 will keep them stable financially, mentally and personally.
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, a person with a constant job can settle up in
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 place with no unnecessary relocations like those with temporary, and
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 opting for early employment
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 helps them personally as well as keeps them out of stress. So, working persistently in the same company will not only help a man in terms of career life but
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 provide them stability in ample ways.
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, a person with a frequently changing job might have more learning experience than those who
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 from an early age at a single organization. But, those in contract or temporary positions, are at high risk of not having any job security.
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, according to the research from statistics of US working people, it was shown that those who have a constant occupation are prone to be more satisfied when compared to those with changing positions. As
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 these are not only changing their jobs but
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 their
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 location which impacts the adaptability of
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 to a particular place and
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 the need for relocation often due to their company requirements.
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, in the conclusion
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 can always opt for different careers but, the advantages of having an everlasting position cannot be overlayed by the other.
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